Hi there Ryan,
Nice to listen to some of your new stuff. These are my reflections of the music:
1. Funny track
I like the lyrics and I find the chorus very nicely performed in terms of vocals. The intro is allright but the FX you use at 0:21 is a bit too loud and very high-pitched and you shoul consider either alternating the velocity or add some sort of filter to it...
I like your piano play and the instrumentation is way better than on your previous tracks. You have definately improved on that area!
Still, I believe you have some work to do with your voice. It is somewhat difficult to describe in writing but you have some problems when you are singing a long note and are changing the chord in the middle of that note (does it make any sense??). Let me try to pinpoint it for you: At 0:41 you sing the word "know" and maintain it through two chords. I.e. you are forced to bend your voice to a different pitch in the middle of the word. That is, by all means, fine and this technique is used in many tracks. I think you should practise this technique a bit as you don't seem to master it fully at the moment. I tend to agree with AM
M in his analysis. Maybe you should try to boost you vocal a little bit. The track would be suitable for a little more power on the vocals, in my opinion.
2. Nice to see that you have been following Jason's and mine advice. Once again, I feel that this type of music/singing is most suitable for you! Also, very nice recording quality on this one. I would like to point out the same thing as on the first track: The pitch-bending technique on your vocals. It is not as significant on this track as on the first one, but I can hear it quite clearly. And also at around 0:59 you play metzo forte on the piano, signalling some sort of climax or musical outburst but then you make a "full stop" twice and the vocals are a bit of a mess in that part of the song. I like originality in music, but the double full stop did not suit the track in my opinion. The last 2 lines of vocals are great and nicely, originally performed. Great track!
I still feel that the tracks "No Control" and "C4" are the best you have made so far and from a pure technical point of view I would definately recommend you to go on making that kind of music. It just seems like you are more genuine on those tracks
Best of luck to you!