Feedback needed please on new Music Video/ Song?

John Watt

Member
Muso1070, I listened to all of "Broken World", and have some comments.
First of all, this thread will probably be moved to music videos out of musical instruments, probably.
I'm an old band player, and I'm appreciating the band effort here,
but seeing it as a singer-songwriter getting a backing band happening,
not an overall collaboration between musicians to be a band, where my comments begin.

I like the singer-songwriter, a good looking, clean-cut guy with a soft, soulful tone,
and could privately listen to some songs, so the recording basics are there.
The bassist has a mike in front of him, so I'm assuming he's the harmony vocals,
but the guitarist doesn't have a mike, and isn't playing lead,
on the video, coming across more as the rhythm the acoustic doesn't get to,
so I'd be thinking of adding a lead guitarist for lead and other sounds.
Something tells me you're not as rock, and would want a violinist-flutist,
or a female singer, especially if she's more Irish looking, style-wise.
That's really the only real failure of this video as an international effort,
looking ordinary, generic, nothing Irish about it, when the world is used to Bono and his accent,
or Riverdance, all the lilt and kilt, and I fondly remember lots of long legs prancing and dancing,
making me wish one of them was waiting for me to come back on me fishin'boat.
The bassist, even if he wore mostly grey, projected the most attitude,
his few moves, walking around a little, even bopping along, made me think
he'd look better if his clothes were a lighter colour, mint green or rusty oranges,
with wreath-like branches around his upper toque or adorning his shoulders,
a celtic cross carved into his headstock for upper jab display, sharpened a little,
for stabbing English highwaymen or only inappropriate American audiences.
You're probably not used to playing behind chicken wire, so thrown bottles and objects don't hit you.
Please see Jeff Healey's band, local for me, in "Roadhouse", a real American bar-band movie.

Yes, some plaintive violin weaving around Broken World, or more "The Titanic" soundtrack penny whistles, aargh,
or some phased, flanged and echoed into broken eternity electric guitar tones,
would make this a more complete band effort.

As a fellow musician, I'm sorry to see your Broken World has left you alone,
alone in one piece as a band onstage, no girlfriends looking on lovingly,
no parents, relatives or community getting off on it with you,
not even venue or club patrons fleshing out the concert scene you portray.
You could have lost the TV and paint and whatever else was getting tossed,
something that's been done all over too many times and many ways better,
thinking Garth Brooks and the creeping paint from the walls that crawl over his acoustic piano,
or many MTV videos with liquids being thrown, dropped, sprayed and drained down the main vein,
yeah, some of it not very nice.
The North American viewing mindset is so used to this it would have to involve falling from outer space to be new.
Instead of the TV moments, showing you guys crawling out of a peat hut,
or climbing over a chalk cliff, really getting white with it, would introduce Irish content.
Maybe your guitarist could act as a bog person, and you could bury him under a foot of peat,
and leave him there for a while, for his own benefit, until he loses twenty or thirty pounds.
Yeah! A Broken World could use a bog person coming back to life, or leaning against the bar, really stiffing you.

As you can see, this did inspire me, a Canadian living close to Niagara Falls.
If I lived down the street I'd be walking up to the stage with my guitar in my hand.
But if paint is your thing, wanting to splash up your drab stage and attire,
maybe a modern bingo dapper theme would be the next step for your next video.
I can see the bassist's face, hands and upper arms covered with a white dot pattern,
like Mayan or Australian aboriginal spirit artwork.
By the way, I also like your drummer, as long as he's not sitting back there chafing,
wanting to play heavy metal.
 
Like it - good solid performance video is a video to me and it did the job.

Song sort of gives me an Irish Neil Young feel- maybe that's the harp, does sounds a bit John Mayer.
 

Muso1070

New member
Hello John, thank you very much for such a detailed review, i enjoyed : ))
Good to hear you liked the track and thanks for your imput, much appreciated.
Thanks again
 

Muso1070

New member
Hello EddieRUKiddingVare : ) glad to hear you enjoyed it!!
John Mayer is one of my biggest
influences!
Thanks again
 

Muso1070

New member
Forgot to mention we also used in the video 300 shotgun shells, 30 white rose's, £2000 in notes, 200 syringes, 40 glass bottles, 200 cigarettes, 20 clocks & 1 Tv :)
 
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