This is my music - Page 2

Krummhorn · May-30-2007, 01:18

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mobi

Thank you Krummhorn for your comment. Yes, its me singing there

I dont think Im particularly a good singer but I do my best.
I had to check the word vamp from wikipedia but if I understood correctly you want me to repeat the ending and fade it out? Maybe Ill give it a try.

Mobi,
I think your singing is just fine ... your diction and annunciation of the lyrics are superb, a wonderful quality to have for any singer.

Sorry for the confusion about 'vamp' ... I sometimes forget this forum is International in its scope and always fail to realize that some english words make absolutely no sense in another persons language. Indeed, you are correct about the fade ... maybe the original starting theme could repeat and a pretty gradual fade out.

Mobi · May-30-2007, 01:51

Gosh

That must be the nicest thing anyone ever said about my singing

And Im good in english because I think it as my second language, I almost know it better than my own language. I somehow like it very much and I've been good at it since I was a kid, Im also learning japanese at the moment so maybe someday I'll test it on my songs

I also did like you advised and here's the result, I think it actually sounds better this way, floating away like a ship to sunset

Thank for the tip Krum

So go on, take a peek of the new version.

Krummhorn · May-30-2007, 06:48

Nicely done

, Mobi ... the fade really worked out well

. Keep up the great work

Mobi · Jun-02-2007, 17:57

Hello again fellow MIMF's!
Ive been very productive and I have another jazzy song for you to listen to.
Its a story about mysterious blackmailer

Give me your thoughts about it, cheers!

Jeffrey Hall · Jun-05-2007, 05:45

Hi Mobi,

I listened to both Smokeymix and Malone. These sound pretty good! Very nice thumpy bass fitting the character of the music well.

I can hear your accent, but your English is superb. Compared to the international community, Americans are way behind in their knowledge of foreign languages, so I'm impressed with your fluency.

Malone sounds, to use an English semi-slang word in this context that may or not make any sense, "sultry." I guess that means a sort of dark, smoky, and not quite disrespectful bar, with the band on an irregularly lit stage and lots of folks drowning their sorrows around the tables. At least that's the image it conjured up for me!

Overall, I think I liked Smokeymix a bit better. Your singing fits the music well. On Malone, you are much closer to simply saying the words in time with the music, and in that regard, here's one constructive criticism...your voice sounds very up front relative to the music. I had the feeling that to sit with the band better, you might try adding some breadth or reverb to the voice. That's not needed in Smokeymix, but I think for the more spoken words it might convey the images of the lyrics better, like a singer onstage saying them in a husky voice into the mike. Since I don't do any vocal stuff, I can't say exactly how you'd engineer that, or even if my thoughts are completely off the mark. Just a comment for you to consider or ignore as you wish!

Thanks for posting these; I like jazz a great deal and enjoyed listening to them.

Mobi · Jun-05-2007, 14:36

Hello there Jeffrey thank you for an outstanding review.
Youre getting the right feeling with the word "sultry", I'm trying my best to bring the old smoky jazz bar feeling with these songs. Seems like its working well

Im doing a theme album based on Smokey's place and the world around it so theres going to be plenty of stories and smoky jazz coming up

After being noticed by another reviewer too I decided to add some reverb to Malone's singing parts and it does sound better now, not so "away" from the rest of the band.
I can't update it here since it seems there a limit to attachements but if you want to hear the updated version I'd suggest you try out www.soundclick.com/mobi .

Thanks for listening,
Mobi

Krummhorn · Jun-05-2007, 17:09

Hi Mobi,

Listened to your newest contribution, Malone. Although I liked the voice, I too thought it might better for it to be closer to being spoken as opposed to being sung. However, the warm and humid atmosphere of being in a dimmly lit room is well conveyed by the music tone and effect. My vision of the effect is similar to Jeff's, except I'll add a vocalist wandering about the place while doing the lyrics.

One thought came to mind is perhaps Malone needs to be lengthened a bit, maybe a modulation a whole step upwards to repeat the last third of the song. The key change could be simply accomplished by a simple percussion cadence like thum-whaka-pause- clikety clickety clickety click-a boom-boom-whak-cymbal ...

... well, it's kinda difficult to convey into words the particular sound that I'm hearing in my brain right now. Not being a percussionist I lack the proper expertise to transmit my ideas into written words

Regarding the limitation to attachments here, you have used about 9.46Mb of your allocated 10.0Mb. Just so you know, once have made 50 posts, that limit will also increase to 25Mb. Here the link for posting incentives that gives the whole breakdown. But hey, soundclick works great - nice way to post your songs, too.

All the best ...

Mobi · Jun-06-2007, 02:23

Hello there Krummhorn and thanks again.
Im taking your suggestions into consideration and maybe give them a try, I have never done anything what youre suggesting but Ill see what I can do and keep you posted

And I must say that percussion talk got me confused but I think got the idea

While waiting I just got a new song/story ready, this time we got the band in spotlight, go listen and see what kind of ideas you get

As I havent yet made 50 posts youll have to go to my soundclick page,
www.soundclick.com/mobi , and stream it from there. Soon I have posted enough and Ill add it here as well.

Thanks for everyone for listening,
Mobi

Mobi · Jun-13-2007, 12:17

Now that I've gone over my 50 post limit Im back with one new song and Im going to post "The Band" here too if someone hasnt yet heard it from soundclick.
Going on with the same theme, this time around we have Con City's most deadly assasin in our story, whats going to happen?

Take a look and see how you like it/them

Cheers,
Mobi

Mobi · Jul-17-2007, 02:10

Hello people!
At last I got something new done and I'm here again to get your honest opinions about it. I'm still working on the smooth jazz theme album full of stories about Con City and it's inhabitants, 5 songs ready. So if you got time and intrest, listen to it and see if you like it.
It's called The fall of the Don's.

Thanks,
Mobi

magic_production · Oct-02-2007, 19:49

Yes This Is Great!i Realy Enjoyes Dit!great Jobb

methodistgirl · Oct-06-2007, 18:54

Nice and relaxing. It reminds me of some of the music I grew up with
during the sixties and seventies during some of the folk music years.
I'm trying to think of who you sound like. You remind me of James Tayler
or Spooky Tooth. Don't laugh this used to be a real rock group in the 1960s.
I miss those days. Now that I'm 47 and the pop music is much more
complicated. This kind of music is so simple and smooth like a good glass
of iced tea and sitting by a pool before I go to swim. I don't swim now
because of the way I look now. I'm no longer a skinny 26 year old. I've
gained weight since then. A rotten marrage can do it to you and inlaw
trouble. Going on a diet is like giving up cigarettes!

Everybody knows
when you are on a diet and will offer you anything from fried chicken
to chocolate pie with all the whipped cream on top! People know when
you are giving up cigarettes. There will always be someone who will
offer you a smoke. Temptation can be like a fishing worm dancing in
front of a fish. The fish sees the worm but not the hook until he takes
a bite and gets taken.
judy tooley

Krummhorn · Oct-07-2007, 00:23

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mobi

Hello people!
At last I got something new done and I'm here again to get your honest opinions about it. I'm still working on the smooth jazz theme album full of stories about Con City and it's inhabitants, 5 songs ready. So if you got time and intrest, listen to it and see if you like it. Thanks,Mobi

Mobi,

Sorry for the long delay in responding to these latest contributions of yours. I had some browser problems relating to mp3 files - since resolved as I am now using Mozilla Firefox for my browser instead of IE 7 or Nutscape (mis-spelling intentional -

)

Great music - enjoyed your latest creations alot. It's always so nice to actually understand the lyrics, a wonderful attribute of your songs. The instrumental parts are outstanding too - nice work ... and thanks for sharing with this community.

Mobi · Dec-22-2007, 19:27

Hello everyone again. It's been a long time since I visited here and I should start coming here more often again. I wanted to thank you all for listening to my songs and telling me what you think of them, its always nice to hear that people like the stuff I do. I havent made any songs in a while because of lack of inspiration at the moment but I think I'll start working on this Con City album again soon, so keep an eye out for new stuff in near future. I also wanted to come and tell you that for the first time in my life I got some real radio play here at Finland!! I got selected into thi demo contest last week and I couldnt be more happy about it, it was my goal years ago and now that I made it it's time to try and send some demos to record companies too. That's about all I got to say for now but I'll be posting my new songs here, hopefully soon.
Thanks for everyone paying attention to this thread, it means the world to me.

Krummhorn · Dec-24-2007, 07:06

Hi Mobi,

Great to see you back here again.

Hey, the inspiration will come ... give it time - sometimes we all need a little break from all these thoughts wandering in and out of our brains.

Congrats on getting the air time in Finland!! Looking forward to your next music postings.

Jun-05-2007, 05:45	#20 (permalink)
Jeffrey Hall Ensign, Principal Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Flagstaff, Arizona, USA Posts: 74	Hi Mobi, I listened to both Smokeymix and Malone. These sound pretty good! Very nice thumpy bass fitting the character of the music well. I can hear your accent, but your English is superb. Compared to the international community, Americans are way behind in their knowledge of foreign languages, so I'm impressed with your fluency. Malone sounds, to use an English semi-slang word in this context that may or not make any sense, "sultry." I guess that means a sort of dark, smoky, and not quite disrespectful bar, with the band on an irregularly lit stage and lots of folks drowning their sorrows around the tables. At least that's the image it conjured up for me! Overall, I think I liked Smokeymix a bit better. Your singing fits the music well. On Malone, you are much closer to simply saying the words in time with the music, and in that regard, here's one constructive criticism...your voice sounds very up front relative to the music. I had the feeling that to sit with the band better, you might try adding some breadth or reverb to the voice. That's not needed in Smokeymix, but I think for the more spoken words it might convey the images of the lyrics better, like a singer onstage saying them in a husky voice into the mike. Since I don't do any vocal stuff, I can't say exactly how you'd engineer that, or even if my thoughts are completely off the mark. Just a comment for you to consider or ignore as you wish! Thanks for posting these; I like jazz a great deal and enjoyed listening to them. __________________ Jeff Flagmusic

Jun-05-2007, 17:09	#22 (permalink)
Krummhorn Administrator Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Tucson, Arizona Posts: 5,646 Images: 41	Hi Mobi, Listened to your newest contribution, Malone. Although I liked the voice, I too thought it might better for it to be closer to being spoken as opposed to being sung. However, the warm and humid atmosphere of being in a dimmly lit room is well conveyed by the music tone and effect. My vision of the effect is similar to Jeff's, except I'll add a vocalist wandering about the place while doing the lyrics. One thought came to mind is perhaps Malone needs to be lengthened a bit, maybe a modulation a whole step upwards to repeat the last third of the song. The key change could be simply accomplished by a simple percussion cadence like thum-whaka-pause- clikety clickety clickety click-a boom-boom-whak-cymbal ... ... well, it's kinda difficult to convey into words the particular sound that I'm hearing in my brain right now. Not being a percussionist I lack the proper expertise to transmit my ideas into written words Regarding the limitation to attachments here, you have used about 9.46Mb of your allocated 10.0Mb. Just so you know, once have made 50 posts, that limit will also increase to 25Mb. Here the link for posting incentives that gives the whole breakdown. But hey, soundclick works great - nice way to post your songs, too. All the best ... __________________ Kh ~~. Admiral of the Pipes & Ranks Amateur musicians practice until they get it right ... Professional musicians practice until they can't get it wrong ...

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May-30-2007, 06:48	#18 (permalink)
Krummhorn Administrator Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Tucson, Arizona Posts: 5,646 Images: 41	Nicely done , Mobi ... the fade really worked out well . Keep up the great work

Jun-05-2007, 14:36	#21 (permalink)
Mobi Ensign, Principal Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Tampere, Finland Posts: 74 Images: 1	Hello there Jeffrey thank you for an outstanding review. Youre getting the right feeling with the word "sultry", I'm trying my best to bring the old smoky jazz bar feeling with these songs. Seems like its working well Im doing a theme album based on Smokey's place and the world around it so theres going to be plenty of stories and smoky jazz coming up After being noticed by another reviewer too I decided to add some reverb to Malone's singing parts and it does sound better now, not so "away" from the rest of the band. I can't update it here since it seems there a limit to attachements but if you want to hear the updated version I'd suggest you try out www.soundclick.com/mobi . Thanks for listening, Mobi

Jun-06-2007, 02:23	#23 (permalink)
Mobi Ensign, Principal Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Tampere, Finland Posts: 74 Images: 1	Hello there Krummhorn and thanks again. Im taking your suggestions into consideration and maybe give them a try, I have never done anything what youre suggesting but Ill see what I can do and keep you posted And I must say that percussion talk got me confused but I think got the idea While waiting I just got a new song/story ready, this time we got the band in spotlight, go listen and see what kind of ideas you get As I havent yet made 50 posts youll have to go to my soundclick page, www.soundclick.com/mobi , and stream it from there. Soon I have posted enough and Ill add it here as well. Thanks for everyone for listening, Mobi

Oct-02-2007, 19:49	#26 (permalink)
magic_production Apprentice, Piano Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: romania Posts: 8	Yes This Is Great!i Realy Enjoyes Dit!great Jobb

Oct-06-2007, 18:54	#27 (permalink)
methodistgirl Vice Admiral Virtuoso Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Madisonville,Ky.42431 Posts: 3,985 Images: 3	Nice and relaxing. It reminds me of some of the music I grew up with during the sixties and seventies during some of the folk music years. I'm trying to think of who you sound like. You remind me of James Tayler or Spooky Tooth. Don't laugh this used to be a real rock group in the 1960s. I miss those days. Now that I'm 47 and the pop music is much more complicated. This kind of music is so simple and smooth like a good glass of iced tea and sitting by a pool before I go to swim. I don't swim now because of the way I look now. I'm no longer a skinny 26 year old. I've gained weight since then. A rotten marrage can do it to you and inlaw trouble. Going on a diet is like giving up cigarettes! Everybody knows when you are on a diet and will offer you anything from fried chicken to chocolate pie with all the whipped cream on top! People know when you are giving up cigarettes. There will always be someone who will offer you a smoke. Temptation can be like a fishing worm dancing in front of a fish. The fish sees the worm but not the hook until he takes a bite and gets taken. judy tooley

Dec-22-2007, 19:27	#29 (permalink)
Mobi Ensign, Principal Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Tampere, Finland Posts: 74 Images: 1	Hello everyone again. It's been a long time since I visited here and I should start coming here more often again. I wanted to thank you all for listening to my songs and telling me what you think of them, its always nice to hear that people like the stuff I do. I havent made any songs in a while because of lack of inspiration at the moment but I think I'll start working on this Con City album again soon, so keep an eye out for new stuff in near future. I also wanted to come and tell you that for the first time in my life I got some real radio play here at Finland!! I got selected into thi demo contest last week and I couldnt be more happy about it, it was my goal years ago and now that I made it it's time to try and send some demos to record companies too. That's about all I got to say for now but I'll be posting my new songs here, hopefully soon. Thanks for everyone paying attention to this thread, it means the world to me.

Dec-24-2007, 07:06	#30 (permalink)
Krummhorn Administrator Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Tucson, Arizona Posts: 5,646 Images: 41	Hi Mobi, Great to see you back here again. Hey, the inspiration will come ... give it time - sometimes we all need a little break from all these thoughts wandering in and out of our brains. Congrats on getting the air time in Finland!! Looking forward to your next music postings.