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    Commodore of Choirs, Charm and Codes Trebbien's Avatar
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    Your eyes!

    I wrote a poem some years ago, and it has been in my drawer since (actually I forgot it existed), but here it is.

    (Warning: A bit sentimental and very "girlie-like" )

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    Your eyes

    When I see into your eyes
    I see fear
    Fear of feeling inadequate
    Fear of getting hurt
    Fear of being abandoned

    When I see into your eyes
    I see courage
    Courage to love
    Courage to be honest
    Courage to be vulnerable

    When I see into your eyes
    I see doubt
    Doubt of who you are
    Doubt of who I am
    Doubt if there's any sense to it all

    When I see into your eyes
    I see hope
    Hope of being loved
    Hope of being understood
    Hope that God will hear your prayers

    When I see into your eyes
    I see anger
    Anger of being misunderstood
    Anger of being used
    Anger of being so much in doubt

    When I see into your eyes
    I see love
    Love for your self
    Love for other people
    Love for me

    When I see into your eyes
    I see you - I see me
    I love your eyes
    when they look at me
    and I get the chance to see you....

    Trebbien

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    Re: Your eyes!

    That's a very beautiful poem, with a strong emotional impact!
    Very well done! Feel free to post any of your writings


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    Re: Your eyes!

    I'll take up that offer

    Ophelia
    When it rains tonight, I'll go out and play.
    I'll build a sandcastle in the rain
    And sprinkle flowers all over it.
    I'll sing it happy songs
    And laugh over the cold, wet sand.
    As it washes away in the rain,
    I'll sing it a lullaby.
    I'll watch as the flowers float away into the darkness
    Where the light from my torch can't reach.
    And when my torch flickers and dies,
    I'll go live in the sandcastle that was washed away.

    Elaine

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    Re: Your eyes!

    A gypsy queen sold me a dream
    It only cost a smile
    I'd seen her before
    So we closed the door
    And I left her with a child

    A vagabond king can't take along a queen
    That might cramp his style
    There's too many more
    That will close the door
    And risk a gypsies child

    Gypsies pay for the games they play
    It only costs them a smile
    But to smile today
    Is more than I can pay
    'Cause I miss my gypsies child

    Dance.....Dance gypsies child
    Dance all night and day
    Dance....Dance gypsies child
    Listen to the guitars play

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    Re: Your eyes!

    I must say that all these writings are 'Great' thanks for sharing them. most inspiring. Jamie.
    i cant' write or paint or draw, only music making.and that's bad enough

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    Re: Your eyes!

    Would you share some of your music?

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    Commodore of Choirs, Charm and Codes Trebbien's Avatar
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    Re: Your eyes!

    Elaine, I like your poem "Ophelia" very much..... Thanks for sharing!

    Trebbien

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    Re: Your eyes!

    They are Beautiful Poems......Thanks Pamadu/Paul

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    Re: Your eyes!

    very nice

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    Re: Your eyes!

    This is a poem I wrote supposedly in the style of William Shakespeare... I thought I'd post it as it's one of by best attempts!!
    Sonnet

    Will thee not cometh at the cusp of the day?
    To watch as the sun dies itÂ’s watery death
    Plunging to the depths of the sea of silver-grey
    As the birds come to roost in silhouette trees
    As the creatures of the night crawl out to the moon
    Will thee not stay as the skies above darken
    As the stars and the moon begin their celestial dance
    Will thee not sail with me into the night
    On the sea of pure black with the dark waves of silk
    And away we will go to a land all our own
    And thither stay, in a land of no desires
    To live out our lives in perfect harmony
    If thou dost not come on the cusp of the day,
    I will stay on my own, in the cold. Alone.

    Anna

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    Commodore of Choirs, Charm and Codes Trebbien's Avatar
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    Re: Your eyes!

    That is a very beautiful poem, AnnaBanana,

    Very well done

    Trebbien

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    Re: Your Ayes!

    Your ayes

    When I see into your ayes
    I see fear
    Fear of feeling inadequate
    Fear of getting hurt
    Fear of being abandoned

    When I see into your ayes
    I see courage
    Courage to love
    Courage to be honest
    Courage to be vulnerable

    When I see into your ayes
    I see doubt
    Doubt of who you are
    Doubt of who I am
    Doubt if there's any sense to it all

    When I see into your ayes
    I see hope
    Hope of being loved
    Hope of being understood
    Hope that God will hear your prayers

    When I see into your ayes
    I see anger
    Anger of being misunderstood
    Anger of being used
    Anger of being so much in doubt

    When I see into your ayes
    I see love
    Love for your self
    Love for other people
    Love for me

    When I see into your ayes
    I see you - I see ye
    I love your ayes
    when you listen to me

    .........anonomous

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    Re: Your Ayes!

    Thanks Trebbien!
    Anna

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