HELP Brazilian singer and writter

[arturpendragon]

Hi guys, I'm from Brazil and a while ago I've started a band, it's called "Awaken"...
Our main influences are Rush, Led Zeppelin and Pantera.
I'd like you gimme your opinion 'bout my voice, my lyrics and my accent (I'm from Brazil

).
Also tell me if my voice is understandable, and what I could improve.
Thanks guys.
[video=youtube;edz9dIGq-W4]http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature...&v=edz9dIGq-W4[/video]
Lyrics:

Awareness

I was wondering aloud, the way it should be
I was dreaming in proud, the way it could be
And then they said, this will not happen
And then they said, you will not be in heaven

You gotta act, you gotta know,
Gotta be free in your soul

And the road was dirty, there was much debris
Still blocking my way, ahead I could not see
And then they said, this will not happen
And then they said, you will not be in heaven

You gotta act, you gotta know,
Gotta be free in your...
You gotta act, you gotta know,
Gotta be free in your soul

Live by yourself
Do not expect someone else to do it
People haven't good intentions
We are all mercenaries

A day to transcend,
To create new rules
To ignore reviews
Be a bit more of yourself

In front of you
A dark horizon
A place to hide
A piece of awareness

You gotta act, you gotta know,
Gotta be free in your soul

P.S.: Sorry if i've posted in a wrong place.

 

[teddy]

Hello an welcome to the forum. Trust you will enjoy your time here. Afraid I am more of a jazz fan myself

teddy

 

[jdeakan84]

Review of your song


Hey man,

here's what I think of the song and your voice.

The song is good, and the lyrics are good as well.

About your voice, you have a good rasp and gringe to your voice.

The only issue I have is that you seem to take a running start to your high notes, which compromises your pitch and your tone a little bit.

Maybe consider purchasing a vocal program that helps your pitch.