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Ryan Peplinski
Aug-29-2005, 01:30
Hi everyone!

Thanks to all those who checked out my site and songs! I'm back with some more https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/laugh.gif, so let me know what you think!

Talk to you soon,
-Ryan

go here for the songs http://www.ryanpeplinski.com/music

1. "+ The First-Aid Class +" was not based on any actual events in my life. light hearted fun!

2. "C4" is a song I wrote for my girlfriend. (Rune and Jason will probably like this one - I took the vocals down about 36 octaves, lol) https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/cheers444.gif

AM:PM
Aug-29-2005, 17:03
Hey, Firstly nice website! Secondly song nr 1 has a real cool intro. I liked that. I think you should have sung it with a little more intensity, the vocal arrangement as it is makes you sound a little uncertain in some parts, though I can hear you know exactly how you wish to sing it. (It would actually be nice to hear how a rock singer would interpret this song). The song has alot of appeal since you do get "thru" with your song. This is more of my personal opinion and may lack objectivity... BTW C4 is real cute!

Rune Vejby
Aug-29-2005, 17:47
Hi there Ryan,


Nice to listen to some of your new stuff. These are my reflections of the music:

1. Funny track https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif I like the lyrics and I find the chorus very nicely performed in terms of vocals. The intro is allright but the FX you use at 0:21 is a bit too loud and very high-pitched and you shoul consider either alternating the velocity or add some sort of filter to it...
I like your piano play and the instrumentation is way better than on your previous tracks. You have definately improved on that area!
Still, I believe you have some work to do with your voice. It is somewhat difficult to describe in writing but you have some problems when you are singing a long note and are changing the chord in the middle of that note (does it make any sense??). Let me try to pinpoint it for you: At 0:41 you sing the word "know" and maintain it through two chords. I.e. you are forced to bend your voice to a different pitch in the middle of the word. That is, by all means, fine and this technique is used in many tracks. I think you should practise this technique a bit as you don't seem to master it fully at the moment. I tend to agree with AM:PM in his analysis. Maybe you should try to boost you vocal a little bit. The track would be suitable for a little more power on the vocals, in my opinion.

2. Nice to see that you have been following Jason's and mine advice. Once again, I feel that this type of music/singing is most suitable for you! Also, very nice recording quality on this one. I would like to point out the same thing as on the first track: The pitch-bending technique on your vocals. It is not as significant on this track as on the first one, but I can hear it quite clearly. And also at around 0:59 you play metzo forte on the piano, signalling some sort of climax or musical outburst but then you make a "full stop" twice and the vocals are a bit of a mess in that part of the song. I like originality in music, but the double full stop did not suit the track in my opinion. The last 2 lines of vocals are great and nicely, originally performed. Great track!


I still feel that the tracks "No Control" and "C4" are the best you have made so far and from a pure technical point of view I would definately recommend you to go on making that kind of music. It just seems like you are more genuine on those tracks https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif


Best of luck to you!

Ryan Peplinski
Sep-03-2005, 22:40
Hey Guys!

Thanks so much for taking the time to listen to my latest tunes.

Okay here we go https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif

1. "The First-Aid Class" I can't wait for the day for vocals to be where I want them to be, should be exciting for everyone. Rune, the part where I sing, “know”, I wanted the melody to fall on that bar of music, but perhaps it was the transition that threw you off (my apologies). It might have something to do with musical influences?? I don’t know, but I will work through it https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif AM:PM I’m working on my rock-vocals, any tips, on singing, I’ve heard your Demo Track, nice song and vocals!

2. “C4” I knew you’d like it Rune! I wonder if Jason has had a chance to listen to it… 2/3’s through the song (the climax of my short song, lol) I have an expletive (a swear word, “sh*t”), and I edited it for sensory/tasteful reasons for the mass. My girlfriend’s very happy with the song (sorry ladies, I’m taken for the moment, lol)

More songs to come, I’ll keep everyone posted! I’m sending out a Ryan Peplinski Newsletter soon, don’t miss out https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/wink.gif

You guys are awesome thanks again for your comments.


All the best,
-Ryan

Rune Vejby
Sep-04-2005, 00:06
You are welcome, Ryan https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif

Please do not hesitate to post in here again when you have additional material available...

AM:PM
Sep-04-2005, 13:43
AM:PM I’m working on my rock-vocals, any tips, on singing, I’ve heard your Demo Track, nice song and vocals!





Hi Ryan,
I dont really know if am the right person to give tips about singing but let me have a go!

I noticed you singing voice lacks energy- the emotive energy that may envoke a de javu from the listener. Its probably because you focus on delivering the lyrics on cue (I have been there!). I would advise you to focus on the mood that your lyrics convey instead. Take say a 5 minute break where you concentrate on the mood and then sing it. Sing it like the person you have in mind is standing right next to you and you want them to know the plain truth about whats on you mind . Let it come from the bottom of your heart and let you heart dictate a while. If a different word comes instead of what you had written earlier just sing it and let it come thru. Do 3-5 takes and choose the one which feels true to your feelings. That way you will sound convincing.
Another good idea is to collab with people on musical projects that really aint your style - for you I'd say hard rock. The macho voice required will make you sing ín an explosive testesterone filled style. It will make it easier for you to moul dit down to your style.
Kind regards

Ryan Peplinski
Sep-07-2005, 04:34
Thanks for the pointers AM:PM, I will definitely give your suggestions a try https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/smile.gif Right now, it's allergy season in Canada, and my throat and nose are all stuffed up https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/frown.gif After allergy season I'll get to work. I have some friends that play in a hard rock band, and I think they might be up for that (I can be their back-up karaoke singer). Thanks again for everything, I'll keep you posted (Rune too) on my progress.

Sincerely,
-Ryan

PS. Rune do you sing?

Rune Vejby
Sep-07-2005, 17:13
Sorry to hear about your allergy, Ryan https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/frown.gif

And no, I don't really sing (not to other people anyway https://www.magle.dk/ubbthreads/images/graemlins/wink.gif), but I have worked with vocal arrangements a couple of times....