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sonic_mat
Jan-03-2007, 05:17
:confused: Now, before ya'll report me. I need help with writing a song. I said before ya report me cause im new and i dunno if tis is the right spot for it. I need some lyrics for a prog song. I thinkin along the lines of, Firth of fifth and Everyday (both steve hackett). PLZ HELP ME THANK YOU!;)

Art Rock
Jan-08-2007, 13:53
Worms shroud helpless fangs
Sorrow engulfs silver minions
Black cats kiss inner webs
Souls slice mocking manacles
Prayers lock up diseased treachery
Spirits suffer barren treachery
Evil sobs lethargic deception
Oblivion spews forth precious innocents
Hunger secretes embittered carrion
Sorrow desires incessant tears
Prayers writhe cringing needles
Devils slice darkened decrepitude
Prayers drink embittered passion
A ravenous She-wolf kisses lethargic nothingness
Souls spin baleful beauty
A dull knife summons embittered requiem

You're welcome. :)

Trollheart
Nov-28-2007, 15:33
That's just a list of lines, none of which make sense. How is that anything like "Firth of Fifth", which tells a story? What are your lyrics supposed to mean?

Why not something like

In darkest night I slumber fitfully turning
Fearing yet longing for the questing fingers of the new dawn.
It's been minutes, it's been years since I last saw your face
And I feel it's so hard for me to carry on.
My horse is watching over me as I lie here
A lone sentinel, his breath plumes in the midnight air
And I dream dark disturbed dreams,
I hear half-remembered screams
And I wake
And you're not there.

(Crap maybe, but at least it makes some sort of sense. You can't just spout a stream of consciousness and call it a lyric!)

No offence, I just dont see how your lyric could be made into a song....

Art Rock
Jan-04-2008, 13:59
ROFL - did not think anybody would take that seriously...

Contratrombone64
Jan-07-2008, 07:47
Art - made as good sense to me as any contemporary lyric ...